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duck_or_rabbit, who requested Remus, Greyback and the prompt malnourish. I should say here and now that I have abandoned any hope of achieving only 100 words in any of these, unless it's in the intro or title. This one's 395 and still feels short...
Lessons
“How are you, Lupin? Such a shame you missed out last night.”
The voice, coming from the doorway, is solicitous. The dark, misshapen figure, blocking out the early morning sunrise, is not.
“Better now.” Remus lays his quill down and smoothes the ragged piece of parchment out before looking up.
Greyback takes a couple of steps forward, filling the little hut, and smiles. The top lip curling upwards to reveal the yellow incisors. “Lot of sickness about, it seems. Poor food, even bad food I’ve been told, laying people low, with no trace of what it was— ”
“It was odd,” Remus agrees. “But I’m always careful what I eat.”
Greyback frowns. “Starvation leads to bad transformations and wolves too weak and feeble to hunt like last night. What use are they then?”
“There are worse kinds of starvation.” Remus watches the pink and gold light of dawn gently touching the edge of the uneven trellis table he uses as a desk.
“You’re right. Up to the rest of us to provide at these times. Can’t have such as you suffering. Not when I need your help.”
“My help?”
“Mmn.” Greyback takes another step forward and idly picks up the piece of parchment in his darkly stained hands. “Never been much for the letters or reading myself, and when I ask around all the youngsters tell me Lupin’s the one to go to. He'll get me sorted out in no time with a lesson or two!”
“Learning to read and write,” Remus hesitates. “Opens many doors for such as us.”
“Not really proof of that though, are you? Being here.” Greyback gives a short laugh and puts the parchment down. “Doesn’t say much for that quick brown fox you’re on about, either. Still, no use harping on. I need to send a report and my usual letter writer – he got sick last night as well. Can’t understand it, but good job he got the word out to us in the nick of time.”
Remus picks up the quill carefully again. A tiny drop of ink blots the parchment, spreading outwards, as his hand shakes slightly. “What do you want to say?”
“Ah, you see, it’s always the spelling I struggle with. You’ll have to help me out here a bit, Lupin. Brains versus brawn.” The top lip curls back again over the wet teeth. “Now tell me how you'd spell … Montgomery?”
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“How are you, Lupin? Such a shame you missed out last night.”
The voice, coming from the doorway, is solicitous. The dark, misshapen figure, blocking out the early morning sunrise, is not.
“Better now.” Remus lays his quill down and smoothes the ragged piece of parchment out before looking up.
Greyback takes a couple of steps forward, filling the little hut, and smiles. The top lip curling upwards to reveal the yellow incisors. “Lot of sickness about, it seems. Poor food, even bad food I’ve been told, laying people low, with no trace of what it was— ”
“It was odd,” Remus agrees. “But I’m always careful what I eat.”
Greyback frowns. “Starvation leads to bad transformations and wolves too weak and feeble to hunt like last night. What use are they then?”
“There are worse kinds of starvation.” Remus watches the pink and gold light of dawn gently touching the edge of the uneven trellis table he uses as a desk.
“You’re right. Up to the rest of us to provide at these times. Can’t have such as you suffering. Not when I need your help.”
“My help?”
“Mmn.” Greyback takes another step forward and idly picks up the piece of parchment in his darkly stained hands. “Never been much for the letters or reading myself, and when I ask around all the youngsters tell me Lupin’s the one to go to. He'll get me sorted out in no time with a lesson or two!”
“Learning to read and write,” Remus hesitates. “Opens many doors for such as us.”
“Not really proof of that though, are you? Being here.” Greyback gives a short laugh and puts the parchment down. “Doesn’t say much for that quick brown fox you’re on about, either. Still, no use harping on. I need to send a report and my usual letter writer – he got sick last night as well. Can’t understand it, but good job he got the word out to us in the nick of time.”
Remus picks up the quill carefully again. A tiny drop of ink blots the parchment, spreading outwards, as his hand shakes slightly. “What do you want to say?”
“Ah, you see, it’s always the spelling I struggle with. You’ll have to help me out here a bit, Lupin. Brains versus brawn.” The top lip curls back again over the wet teeth. “Now tell me how you'd spell … Montgomery?”
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Date: 2008-08-01 03:33 pm (UTC)Excellent drabble!
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Date: 2008-08-01 10:23 pm (UTC)I should have written these two drabbles the other way round in order, lol. But thank you very much, and I would like to write some more cat and mouse games between them sometime - except I want Remus to win!
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Date: 2008-08-01 03:53 pm (UTC)I concur with
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Date: 2008-08-03 03:40 pm (UTC)After I've said all that, it seems wrong to say I enjoyed writing this, but I really did! Evil slimeballs are fun to write, lol. Perhaps I will do some more one day, and I'm very glad you liked it. Thank you.:D
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Date: 2008-08-01 04:14 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2008-08-01 10:29 pm (UTC)I'd quite like to write some more fic with these two playing cat and mouse, so you may get that backstory, lol. And, thank you. :)
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Date: 2008-08-01 05:51 pm (UTC)I am so happy that I met you for more ways then one. I truly enjoy reading your fics! These kinds of challenges always excite me. I can't wait to read more as I am usually left with this feeling after reading something you wrote. (omg *blushes* I almost typed wore by accident... thankfully I self edit LOL) I hope you have a great weekend!
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Date: 2008-08-03 04:54 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2008-08-01 06:58 pm (UTC)Well done.
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Date: 2008-08-03 04:59 pm (UTC)Thanks again!:D
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Date: 2008-08-01 08:21 pm (UTC)I really thought JKR missed a trick with Greyback - fanfic Greybacks are always so much more frightening than hers, and I liked this take, Greyback being almost Voldemort-like, knowing everything that goes on and playing cat and mouse with people for his own enjoyment.
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Date: 2008-08-03 09:25 am (UTC)no subject
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Date: 2008-08-08 06:50 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2008-08-03 05:09 pm (UTC)I know JKR had to be careful about the implications of Greyback (his liking for biting kids and eating people's faces being slightly dodgy bedtime reading material for mums and dads, I imagine?), but when he actually turns up in the books he always seems a bit of a let-down. Whereas I like the idea of this very simple but cunning and brutal man, who won't abide by normal rules, and therefore is very difficult for someone like Remus to outwit purely by intelligence alone. Especially when beset by doubts himself. One of my few glimmers of joy from DH was the werewolves not turning up at the end (though she probably forgot them;)), as I thought at least we can argue he might just have made the vital difference there...
Thanks again! (Do you think Nicholas Cage, bulked up, would perfect in the role...;))
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Date: 2008-08-03 05:36 pm (UTC)I'd gladly audition for the Trelawney role in DH just for the pleasure of dropping a crystal ball on his head, lol.
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Date: 2008-08-03 06:33 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2008-08-01 10:41 pm (UTC)From the perspective of craft, I love that you haunted me with dialogue, not description. Being out of Remus' head and witnessing his interaction with Greyback was where I hoped this would go.
THANK YOU! :D *hugs*
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Date: 2008-08-03 06:46 pm (UTC)Thank you, both for a great prompt and for enjoying it too.:D
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Date: 2008-08-03 07:30 pm (UTC)I would definitely read that, although I already read everything you write. Your take on Greyback's retribution for Remus besting him would be fascinating. As the adage goes, if the devil's in the details, he was right there to greet Remus when he arrived at Hogwarts in DH. I'm really not cruel, I just didn't take it as hard when so many of my favorite characters got spent, lol.
(especially as I was imagining Sirius/OC and 'bath' at the time, no idea why;))
Just wrote a drabble with Lily and Sirius in the bath. Kind of. Maybe that's what you mapped on to? ;)
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Date: 2008-08-03 08:15 pm (UTC)LOL. Must be great minds. I honestly hadn't looked, today being an almost total non-computer event as, after a lie in, we finally saw The Dark Knight, and then I thought I must do my review replies and... I'm still doing them. While trying to think about the next drabble. But I'll look forward to reading that, it'll be an excellent carrot.:D
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Date: 2008-08-03 08:34 pm (UTC)Ah, I really liked that film; I'm a reader of the comics and could easily been let down. Really impressed by how well Nolan is weaving DC Batman's story.
I'd like a Ledger!Joker and Oldman!Gordon icon with a zaney "Why (or why not) so Sirius?" as the text, but I haven't sorted out the proper phrase yet...
Carry on.
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Date: 2008-08-03 09:55 pm (UTC)I'd like a Ledger!Joker and Oldman!Gordon icon with a zaney "Why (or why not) so Sirius?" as the text, but I haven't sorted out the proper phrase yet...
LOL. I think you ought to have the one of Ben combined with one of Batman, and ask why all the best men wear leather and ride bikes?
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Date: 2008-08-03 10:49 pm (UTC)Or dress robes. I just found this today:
http://s41.photobucket.com/albums/e290/tsaress/benbarnes/easyvirtue/benbarnes.jpg
*need to write Sirius and Remus in dress robes*
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Date: 2008-08-02 03:18 am (UTC)I love the detail of the ink blot and the shaking hand despite the outward calm -- although I don't suppose it escaped Greyback's notice.
I saw above that you might expand this one sometime, and I really hope you do, even though it's going to scare me to read it. ;)
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Date: 2008-08-03 09:42 pm (UTC)The idea of them playing cat and mouse, intelligence versus cunning, and Remus being hamstrung by his own code of human ethics is a fascinating one. And one I wanted SO much to see tackled in DH, I think that was one of my biggest disappointments. Though as the werewolves didn't turn up at the end, that's gone down as a definite Remus triumph for me, lol.
since to all appearances even he, with all his advantages, has come down to it himself (I can't help but wonder if Dumbledore (or JKR?) failed to think that point all the way through).
I know. It would be great to explore that dilemna in fanfic - I'd love to find some way for Remus to best Greyback at some point, but at what cost to himself?
Thanks for reading and enjoying, if that's the word!
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Date: 2008-08-03 06:10 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2008-08-03 06:25 pm (UTC)Am pleased you can see the parallels because I was going for just what you've described - that it's the goodness in Remus that means he's hamstrung when dealing with such as Greyback, who abides by no rules. But I was so, so hoping that in DH we were going to see him best Greyback, both by intelligence, and by showing just a bit of the ruthless Remus who'd have killed Peter for betraying someone he loved. Grr. As it is, I shall have to take the crumb of comfort which was the werewolves not fighting at the end, which I've decided means Remus got through to them...
Thank you! Especially for being frightened. ;)
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Date: 2008-08-09 01:31 pm (UTC)You really have to write some more about this time - this snippet is so tantalising! I love the complexity of the situation, with them both trying to out-manouvere each other and saying one thing and meaning something else entirely.
Mainly though, I have to complement you on Greyback - he really makes my skin crawl.
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Date: 2008-08-12 01:19 pm (UTC)I do think this was the ultimate Catch 22 situation for Remus; confronted by his personal nemesis, and continually hamstrung by the fact that it is his own humanity that defeats him. Having done this shortie here, I would love to have them playing some more cat and mouse stuff sometime. I'd have to find a way to let Remus best him somehow, though I think the interesting thing then would be the cost of that...
Many thanks. Glad you liked it!:D
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Date: 2008-08-19 04:02 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2008-08-24 05:00 pm (UTC)It really has made me want to write a much longer fic for these two at some point. Don't think it will be a very cheery birthday read, though, so it'll have to wait!
Thank you again.:D